'The Essence of Black'

[thrihyrne]

This one's for llembas. Began it months ago, it was abandoned, and then was finished up today. Do enjoy, though it does have a high angst content. It makes me cry, and I'm the author. It's R/S, in case you're wondering.

<--- hopeless

(off to go write hot, non-angsty smut for Romanticalgirl and Licia_North)

Yet again, it's easier just to divert you to my website. The Essence of Black

Comments

[llembas.livejournal.com]

You finished it! Yay! And it's so so angsty and good. And I love your talent for writing descriptions. This one in particular is perfection:

Remus lay behind Sirius, their intersecting angles of arms and thighs, knees and wrists, toes to
socked feet creating a unique geometric figure impossible to map even by an expert in Arithmancy.

[thrihyrne.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad you like. :) And that you appreciated that sentence. I'm actually rather proud of this one and the descriptions, and for going back and finishing it, making Remus a bit more book!Remus than Kristi!Remus. There are some interesting images in the descriptions for this, and I'm thrilled that you picked up on them. It is rather high angst, but oh well. You know it's coming. I think my favorite bit is about "Tainted Love" and it being his valiant for truth. And the sandbar. I'm such a description junkie.

Did you get the package I sent you before you went to MD? If not, it'll be there for you upon arrival. Big 'ol beta. ;)

[geoviki.livejournal.com]

That was really well written. I've never read a fic that linked the episodes together with scent before, and it's very effective. And the scenes are all nicely chosen from their life together and apart.

As he choked back tears, surrendering to his own orgasm, Remus cursed fate by chanting Sirius' name over and over in benediction.


Such a beautiful line!

This nice a fic deserves better formatting; you're right. You can just edit this entry and fix it manually in the edit window. I think it would be worth it - it shouldn't take you too long. The spacing is a bit distracting as it is now.

[thrihyrne.livejournal.com]

That was really well written. I've never read a fic that linked the episodes together with scent before, and it's very effective. And the scenes are all nicely chosen from their life together and apart.

Thank you so much! I did just go and take out one of the "[br]"s at the end of each line, but it doesn't seem to have done much, unfortunately. Oh well. It's over at skyehawke as well with proper formatting. I'm so glad that you read it, and also that it was a new concept to you. Which perhaps means that I'm not rewriting a tired R/S plot. Because I'd hate that! They do say that so much of our memory is tied up in scents, that smelling a particular odor can bring back a wave of things we thought we had forgotten, so I wanted to play with that a bit. And write about what Remus' life might have been like in the interim, as well as Sirius' return to "regular" wizarding society. They (R/S) were the first Harry Potter 'ship that I discovered, and I wanted to do them justice. I'm glad to hear that you felt it was well-written. Thank you again for reading and commenting. As you know, it's wonderful to know that one isn't writing into the void! ;)

v. lovely

[snottygrrl.livejournal.com]

do so love remus, and really like the way you brought us through the whole relationship...loved that it began and ended with the bottle of noir - v. nice, like those circular things....also v. fond of the Arithmancy line and love, love, love the fact that someone else acknowledges the relationship and that it is one of the twins....like the cop werewolf too [grin] you do good stuff lady!

Re: v. lovely

[thrihyrne.livejournal.com]

v. nice, like those circular things....

So glad you enjoyed it!! I do like having things in parallel, or 'come full circle' as it were.

love, love, love the fact that someone else acknowledges the relationship and that it is one of the twins....

Well... hee. As you know, I have George/Remus on the mind, so I had to put him in there. *grin*

like the cop werewolf too

Oh good!! I just thought it would be cool for him to run into another werewolf, and have her be the one who allows him to go back to the U.K.

Thank you so much for all of your comments!

Re: v. lovely

[snottygrrl.livejournal.com]

is this one gonna end up anywhere where folk that aren't on your special lj list could read it (like hidden on your website?) i've got a good friend who i'd like to see it if you don't mind, i can always cut and paste, but was just wondering....

Re: v. lovely

[thrihyrne.livejournal.com]

Oh, yep. Go to
http://www.thrihyrne.net/EssenceofBlack.html

This one, since it's R/S, I'll also try to archive in a few R/S archives, but haven't done so yet. I spent the morning at my stepson's track camp, though I did have to run home to put on a shirt to go with my SPF 45 and Australian-purchased hat and sunnies to try and prevent skin cancer. It's very, very sunny here.

*off to write*

Re: v. lovely

[snottygrrl.livejournal.com]

sweet - thanks!
will send to my friend....

*off to turn up heat and attempt to warm up the flat enough to be able to feel fingers*

[miraminx.livejournal.com]

This is really good. The use of the scent to link together the different parts is really effective, and I loved seeing Remus's thoughts about Sirius over the years (it's a nice touch that Sirius annoys him at the beginning and end of their relationship!). I liked the bit set in Halifax a lot-- "Tainted Love" works frighteningly well for Remus.

There are lots of gorgeous descriptions and evocative phrases, of course (that seems to be one of the hallmarks of your writing). Just to single out one, this line really struck me: Honest to Merlin it was siriusblackpadfoot sitting there, just sitting there, in that chair, in front of the fire, always cold, always withdrawn, always untouchable…

Thanks for this lovely story.

[thrihyrne.livejournal.com]

This is really good.

To hear this from you is the most wondrous thing. Thank you.

I liked the bit set in Halifax a lot-- "Tainted Love" works frighteningly well for Remus.

Yes, it does, both in the time period and the text. I just hate to have inflicted it on him, but JKR did it first, so...

There are lots of gorgeous descriptions and evocative phrases, of course (that seems to be one of the hallmarks of your writing).

You have now completely made my weekend. From someone whose writing I adore so much, to hear that, is bliss. I'm working on my ability to write dialogue, I swear, but per my other writing friends, perhaps it is the interweaving of description and action that is my hallmark. I'll certainly be thrilled with 'gorgeous descriptions and evocative phrases,' never fear. I can't wait to finish the twinfic for you to read! And there's my George/Remus story, "Cartography of Fire." Probably not a pairing you're interested in, but post OotP, it seems to work. Not to mention its sequel, which I'm writing now.

Thanks for this lovely story.

Thank you for reading it, and making comments.