Mmm, I love it. Especially like Swift's voice. I think you have him down in his naivete and hero worship. I also like the way you paint Cal through his eyes. Lovely last sentence: "My dreams were of incense and violet sand dunes, of Cal's lips on my forehead and the beating of dragon wings."
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regna
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Date: 2008-04-20 02:41 am (UTC)