I'm glad Velaxis helped Vaysh out some with a bit of tenderness to go with the harsh reality of his words. Your characterization of Vel is great: Velaxis' personality was so strong I didn't doubt that he could create his own weather. Velaxis: a kaleidoscope of subtlety; a bristling arsenal of brutal wit; sensuality— vital, compelling, and transient as a mirage.
"Why does that sound like foreplay?" (I love that your characters are smart.)
"Dear Vaysh. Frigid, defensive, exquisite Vaysh. There is nothing obvious about me at all." His voice was a purr of smoke. "I could be a messenger; I could choose to bed Fate until he was crying out my name in ecstasy. I could, and do, keep secrets. From Thiede." this cracked cup, this broken vessel. I almost wished for a bruise, a memory, for there to have been roughness in our coupling grinding the fine grit of Velaxis' proclamations between my teeth. And I liked the oblique description of Cal. All good stuff.
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Date: 2008-04-02 06:10 am (UTC)Velaxis' personality was so strong I didn't doubt that he could create his own weather. Velaxis: a kaleidoscope of subtlety; a bristling arsenal of brutal wit; sensuality— vital, compelling, and transient as a mirage.
"Why does that sound like foreplay?" (I love that your characters are smart.)
"Dear Vaysh. Frigid, defensive, exquisite Vaysh. There is nothing obvious about me at all." His voice was a purr of smoke. "I could be a messenger; I could choose to bed Fate until he was crying out my name in ecstasy. I could, and do, keep secrets. From Thiede."
this cracked cup, this broken vessel.
I almost wished for a bruise, a memory, for there to have been roughness in our coupling
grinding the fine grit of Velaxis' proclamations between my teeth.
And I liked the oblique description of Cal.
All good stuff.