(just an aside; I love that I now know why you put clue words in the subject heading. That's really smart!!)
I think it went well though, as there was clear indications the POV had changed, exp. a new paragraph. To change POV in the same paragraph I think would get confusing.
Yeah; this one was changing every couple of paragraphs, and it was a sex scene, which people seem to be more forgiving about. I just figure you're being somewhat easier on yourself if you stick with the one person, but at times you do have to work harder to do that.
Verb tense can be tricky. A lot of writing is, and it takes having someone else point things out to you. I still think that llembas should be given some kind of beta sainthood for teaching me as much as she did. Some of my earliest stuff before I knew any better was really 'this is making my eyeballs bleed' kind of horrible. I've come a long way!! :D
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Re: POV
Date: 2006-09-23 02:24 pm (UTC)I think it went well though, as there was clear indications the POV had changed, exp. a new paragraph. To change POV in the same paragraph I think would get confusing.
Yeah; this one was changing every couple of paragraphs, and it was a sex scene, which people seem to be more forgiving about. I just figure you're being somewhat easier on yourself if you stick with the one person, but at times you do have to work harder to do that.
Verb tense can be tricky. A lot of writing is, and it takes having someone else point things out to you. I still think that