That was very moving and intelligent. The films were disgraceful in making Gimli comic relief, though his interaction with Galadriel was not too badly portrayed. It is nice to see him being given the respect that he is due.
If you don't mind, I have a couple of comments:
"internalise" is a very modern usage, and has a rather jolting effect. Also I am not certain that "ethereal" is an entirely apposite description of Galadriel, who if anything is more "there" than most people the Company meet. For me anyway it has certain unfortunate connotations of Victorian tweeness.
"stocky" in this context feels like a euphemism, which seems unlikely for a Dwarf on this issue. Why not just "short"? Also would height really be something that Elves hold against Dwarves, or Dwarves be sensitive enough about to construct euphemisms for? Or slow thinking, for that matter. Elves might criticise Dwarves for excessive devotion to gold and astuteness in bargaining maybe, but surely not for either stupidity or shortness.
I realise that these are rather nit-picky remarks, sorry. But it's a lovely fic, so I thought it worth mentioning the very minor points above.
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Date: 2006-04-28 03:54 am (UTC)If you don't mind, I have a couple of comments:
"internalise" is a very modern usage, and has a rather jolting effect.
Also I am not certain that "ethereal" is an entirely apposite description of Galadriel, who if anything is more "there" than most people the Company meet. For me anyway it has certain unfortunate connotations of Victorian tweeness.
"stocky" in this context feels like a euphemism, which seems unlikely for a Dwarf on this issue. Why not just "short"? Also would height really be something that Elves hold against Dwarves, or Dwarves be sensitive enough about to construct euphemisms for? Or slow thinking, for that matter. Elves might criticise Dwarves for excessive devotion to gold and astuteness in bargaining maybe, but surely not for either stupidity or shortness.
I realise that these are rather nit-picky remarks, sorry. But it's a lovely fic, so I thought it worth mentioning the very minor points above.