ext_28234 ([identity profile] elicia8.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] thrihyrne 2006-09-22 07:02 pm (UTC)

this isn't a thorough or eloquent 'english major' response, but...

I don't see anything wrong with it.

If it's done well, I shouldn't even be able to notice it, and it should make sense as part of the story. Only when mishandled does it turn the narrative to shite.

Same with any writing trick or technique, I guess.

:)

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