This is a cut-and-paste of a comment I left on the Forever Wraeththu site, but I am copying here because I want to make sure you receive it.
First, I should tell you that I have not read the books upon which this novella is based. I came to read this story and have ordered the first books in the series on a recommendation from Elfscribe. I am certainly grateful for that. What a beautiful introduction to this world. I adore the way you capture these characters and seamlessly draw me into their universe. From the first paragraphs you led me to accept that this is a stories of beginnings and yet also one of impending loss of innocence. The transition between human and har in these young men is palpable. You give the sense that while inception is irrevocable it, in fact, is only the beginning of their realization of who they are and what they have become. And their conception of it is one of wonder mixed with fear and idealism.
The meeting of Ashmael with Vaysh and his companions is illuminscent: “as haughty and distant as the stars, radiant and far off. ” You give the reader an immediate stake in these characters and totally hook one into caring about what will happen between Ashmael and Vaysh. It is redolent with foreshadowing and bittersweetness even for someone who has not read the books and has no idea of the outcome. The erotic scenes are lush and so lush and glowing. There are so many things right about how you interpret emotions and attachments. If I were try to catalogue the instances where you left me breathless I wouldn’t know where to stop. I give you just one line for starters that completely knocked my socks off. “I knew that he knew what word trembled in me. At last, with the kindness of an executioner, he relieved my agony. Yours. ” Congratulations on gripping storytelling wonderfully executed. I cannot recommend this highly enough. So looking forward to the continuation of this story in your newest WIP.
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First, I should tell you that I have not read the books upon which this novella is based. I came to read this story and have ordered the first books in the series on a recommendation from Elfscribe. I am certainly grateful for that. What a beautiful introduction to this world. I adore the way you capture these characters and seamlessly draw me into their universe. From the first paragraphs you led me to accept that this is a stories of beginnings and yet also one of impending loss of innocence. The transition between human and har in these young men is palpable. You give the sense that while inception is irrevocable it, in fact, is only the beginning of their realization of who they are and what they have become. And their conception of it is one of wonder mixed with fear and idealism.
The meeting of Ashmael with Vaysh and his companions is illuminscent: “as haughty and distant as the stars, radiant and far off. ” You give the reader an immediate stake in these characters and totally hook one into caring about what will happen between Ashmael and Vaysh. It is redolent with foreshadowing and bittersweetness even for someone who has not read the books and has no idea of the outcome. The erotic scenes are lush and so lush and glowing. There are so many things right about how you interpret emotions and attachments. If I were try to catalogue the instances where you left me breathless I wouldn’t know where to stop. I give you just one line for starters that completely knocked my socks off. “I knew that he knew what word trembled in me. At last, with the kindness of an executioner, he relieved my agony. Yours. ” Congratulations on gripping storytelling wonderfully executed. I cannot recommend this highly enough. So looking forward to the continuation of this story in your newest WIP.
P.S. I've friended you. Please friend me back so I won't miss any of your updates.