Damn right. You should feel accomplished. This is an incredible piece of writing.
I love the symmetry of it, first of all--beginning and ending with Faramir's fevered state, first from Denethor's pov, and then from Pippin's pov (the subtle differences in details and mood are potent).
Dernhelm's nightmare, too, is great. With his hand on her shoulder, and she touches his hand? What a wonderful, sensuous moment--one where the knowing reader gives a pleased hoot that he's touching Eowyn, and she knows he doesn't realize it!.
Gah... and the branding of Lobelia's feet? Disturbing and wonderful. I love this glimpse into the horrors taking place in the Shire during this time. It really brings the focus of the danger back to Denethor's mad state, somehow.
On and on and on. There's so much here! I really like this line--Firienfeld, the last eyrie for the Rohirrim unable due to sex or age to fly away South to Gondor. And, you know, every other line in the whole story.
It just screams SUBMIT ME! I MUST BE READ BY ALL!
PS: Dude, talking ravens rock my world! I totally want one. =)
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I love the symmetry of it, first of all--beginning and ending with Faramir's fevered state, first from Denethor's pov, and then from Pippin's pov (the subtle differences in details and mood are potent).
Dernhelm's nightmare, too, is great. With his hand on her shoulder, and she touches his hand? What a wonderful, sensuous moment--one where the knowing reader gives a pleased hoot that he's touching Eowyn, and she knows he doesn't realize it!.
Gah... and the branding of Lobelia's feet? Disturbing and wonderful. I love this glimpse into the horrors taking place in the Shire during this time. It really brings the focus of the danger back to Denethor's mad state, somehow.
On and on and on. There's so much here! I really like this line--Firienfeld, the last eyrie for the Rohirrim unable due to sex or age to fly away South to Gondor. And, you know, every other line in the whole story.
It just screams SUBMIT ME! I MUST BE READ BY ALL!
PS: Dude, talking ravens rock my world! I totally want one. =)